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直接词汇/短语替换
要求:只有通过大量的阅读词汇才能真正做到合理替换。同学不要用自己通过中文意思背诵的同义词来简单替换,尤其不要觉得某些词汇更加高级。其实在雅思写作考官看来,people比individuals更像是正常词汇。
Foreign visitors should pay more than local visitors for cultural and historical attractions.To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?
It is sometimes argued that(有人认为)——(改写)tourists from overseas should be charged more than local residents to visit important sites and monuments.I completely disagree with this idea.
注意:写作不是一朝一夕可以获得的,需要积累,需要多读多看。
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指代的使用(pronouns/references)
Most young people are already under enough pressure with their studies,without being given the added responsibility of working in their spare time.School is just as demanding as a full-time job,and teachers expect 【their studies】to do homework and exam revision on top of attending lessons every day.When young people do have some free time,we should encourage【them】to enjoy it with【their friends】or to spend it doing sports and other leisure activities.【They】have many years of work ahead of 【them】when【they】finish【their】studies.
注意:
- they(人、东西、复数代词);this/that(指代前面讲过的一件事件,this/that没有区别,e.g. this means/that means都OK在雅思口语里可能指代东西)
- it(指代一个东西;指代后面要提到的一个动作或者一个事情)
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词性的变化
Some people think that 【strict punishments严厉的惩罚;punish (people) strictly】 for driving offenses are the key to reducing traffic accidents.Others,however,believe that other measures would be more effective in improving【road safety道路安全;safe driving安全的驾驶;drive safely】
Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
改写的版本:
People have different views with regard to the question of how to 【make our roads safer 】In my view,both punishments and a range of other measures can be used together to promote better habits of 【driving safety安全的驾驶】.
注意:其实改写只需要改写一点东西就可以很成功了。
这三句改写后:
Strict punishments can improve road safety.严厉的惩罚可以提高道路安全。
The government can promote good driving habits among drivers by strictly punishing traffic offenses.政府可以培养/推动好的驾驶习惯,通过严厉的惩罚交通肇事。
Roads can be much safer if the drivers who break traffic regulations are strictly punished/penalized.
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从灵魂深处换个说法
除了第一段的改写之外,你最应该考虑的是核心段第一句的改写。不要总是在核心段开头尝试写背景/感慨/特别细节的论证,这个地方应该写的是对整个段落的概述,起到方向句的作用。这句话一般来自与【题目或者个人观点的改写】。先宏观一些然后再降下来,给读者一个方向感。
1、Many people,including scientists and amateur astronomers,have conflicting views as to the question of whether we should send signals to contact aliens light years away from the Earth.In my opinion,【although the attempt to search and contact intelligent aliens may bring us some positive changes,we are far from being prepared to do so.】
第二段的第一句应该改写
2、On the one hand,from the perspective of some optimists,there may be great benefits to connecting alien life forms.(污染问题:疾病治疗的问题,万一地球真的有灾难。我们可以外星球移民……)
3、On the other hand,however,I believe that proponents of contacting extraterrestrial life are 《overly optimistic》and that doing so leads to higher possibility of endangering human beings.
(要写展开这段,危险是什么?可能会进攻/掠夺我们……他们的病菌和物种在地球上都不存在。so 让我们危险。)
4、综上所述(结尾段是重复改写)
好好练练改写,会让你的思路清晰和内容连贯,也不会担心自己的写作内容充实。